I think you have some great ideas in there and the plot you have would be wonderful to watch unfold
The only thing I have a problem with is that the baseball coacdh the LV guy ANd the caregiver all meet up and consprie againt vincent and Anthony I just thing it sounds to random and cheap.....Liike how could the coach and LLV guy even know the Care3giveer and trust him enough to let him in the plot to kill, why woulnd't they just think he was sent from Vincent to find out what there plan is,, eww there's a twist he could really be for Vincent....