Honestly it uses some of the same language and scenarios of the original movie. Come up with new scenarios and plots and write it in your own voice instead of trying to mimic other characters that came before them.
Make it original, make it unique, what you have now is a cheap imitation.
Thanks for the review.
A new version of ACT I is being written now, which will be different. It'll be coming this Saturday.
"I'll make him an offer he can't refuse."-Michael Corleone.
