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"The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5240 12/19/03 10:31 AM 12/19/03 10:31 AM
Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope plawrence OP RIP StatMan
plawrence OP RIP StatMan Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope	I wrote this two years ago and reposted it last Christmas and it got a pretty good response. I was gonna wait a week or so and get closer to Christmas, but with all the bashing of Christmas decorations and Christmas music I've been doing in the other thread, I figured i better post it now, before anyone thinks I'm some grinch or something that can't get into the holiday spirit. The Night Of The Hit Attempt 'Twas the night of the hit attempt, and all through the estate Some were not sleeping 'cause the party'd run late The drapes were left open by Fredo with care Not knowing Roth's hitmen soon would be there Kay C. was nestled all snug in her bed While hopes of legitimacy danced in her head And Mama still thinking of Connie and Merle Hoping her daughter would be a good girl When out on the lawn there arose a slight clatter Michael looked through the drapes to see what was the matter Then away from the window he sprang like a hare As the sound of the gunfire rang through the air He crawled on the floor to reach Kay in her bed And then pulled her down while he cradled her head The shooting was over and so was the noise In the room where the children come play with their toys Michael ran out, though his eyes were still bleary "Where's Rocco? Where's Fredo? Where's Hagen and Neri?" "Get them alive, Rocco" is what Michael said But he knew that the hitmen were already dead Back in the house Michael sat down with Tom And said "I'm going to Florida, you'll be the new Don "There's a traitor among us who's name I can't leak" But he thought it was Fredo, so stupid and weak On the way to Miami, Mike started to think About those he had killed without even a blink McCluskey, Sollozzo, Stracchi and Rizzi Moe Greene, Tattaglia, Tessio, and Barzini And he knew he'd be adding one more to that list And when he found him, his lips he would kiss The kiss of death he would get, then his life would be lost But that still left the question: Pentangelli or Roth By the end of the movie, Michael knew who it was Ola, and Fredo, and Roth was the buzz So Mike had them all killed, but his mind was still frozen On Hyman Roth's words about the business he'd chosen Michael tried to retire...his head started to spin "As soon as I'm out, they just pull me back in" He made Vincent the Don, much to his delight And decided to go to the opera that night But due to events which unfolded, to wit: Mike didn't know that there'd be one more hit Both twins were killed; it was really quite scary But what made it worse was, the killer got Mary So Michael died wealthy, although really quite poor He won many battles, but still lost the war And now final words for my friends on this site: Happy holidays to all...watch The Godfather tonight! "Difficult....not impossible"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5241 12/19/03 10:35 AM 12/19/03 10:35 AM
Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 25,984 California The Italian Stallionette
The Italian Stallionette Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 25,984 California	Very good PLaw! I don't remember you posting that before, but then I guess I have a short memory span. Who ever wrote it is very clever. Seems to cover the complete trilogy in a nutshell. TIS "Mankind must put an end to war before war puts an end to mankind. War will exist until that distant day when the conscientious objector enjoys the same reputation and prestige that the warrior does today." JFK "War is over, if you want it" - John Lennon

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5242 12/19/03 10:38 AM 12/19/03 10:38 AM
Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope plawrence OP RIP StatMan
plawrence OP RIP StatMan Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope	Um, I wrote it.... "Difficult....not impossible"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5243 12/19/03 10:40 AM 12/19/03 10:40 AM
Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 25,984 California The Italian Stallionette
The Italian Stallionette Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 25,984 California	No!! Really???? You're pulling my leg???? That's great!!! Such a talented man you are. TIS "Mankind must put an end to war before war puts an end to mankind. War will exist until that distant day when the conscientious objector enjoys the same reputation and prestige that the warrior does today." JFK "War is over, if you want it" - John Lennon

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5244 12/19/03 10:46 AM 12/19/03 10:46 AM
Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 1,849 Netherlands M.M. Floors Underboss
M.M. Floors Underboss Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 1,849 Netherlands	It's beautiful. I really, really like it. You did a great job. Maybe you can make more of them and make a bundle "Godfather rhymes"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5245 12/19/03 10:58 AM 12/19/03 10:58 AM
Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 25,984 California The Italian Stallionette
The Italian Stallionette Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 25,984 California	I thought you were joking about writing it. Seems worthy of publication. I can just see on the back of the DVD Box Set: "Poetic Plot of GF Trilogy" by P. Lawrence. May be your claim to fame. TIS "Mankind must put an end to war before war puts an end to mankind. War will exist until that distant day when the conscientious objector enjoys the same reputation and prestige that the warrior does today." JFK "War is over, if you want it" - John Lennon

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5246 12/19/03 11:03 AM 12/19/03 11:03 AM
Joined: Jul 2001 Posts: 14,900 Beth E Crabby
Beth E Crabby Joined: Jul 2001 Posts: 14,900	You wrote it, PL? I don't believe a thing you say anymore. How about a little less questions and a lot more shut the hell up - Brian Griffin When there's a will...put me in it.

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5247 12/19/03 12:39 PM 12/19/03 12:39 PM
Joined: Jul 2001 Posts: 7,361 Don Sicilia
Don Sicilia Joined: Jul 2001 Posts: 7,361	Where's that jaw dropping emoticon... That was really great, plaw!

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5248 12/19/03 01:05 PM 12/19/03 01:05 PM
Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 8,766 South of the Pinelands MaryCas
MaryCas Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 8,766 South of the Pinelands	Bravo! Bravo! Master Wordsmith. C. Clement Moore would be proud. Maybe next you could tackle the Jabberwocky! Whoever exalts himself will be humbled, whoever humbles himself will be exalted - Matthew 23:12

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5249 12/19/03 02:32 PM 12/19/03 02:32 PM
Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope plawrence OP RIP StatMan
plawrence OP RIP StatMan Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope	Quote Originally posted by MaryCas: Maybe next you could tackle the Jabberwocky! Why, that's what you said last year OK, I'll give it a try.... Beware the one who comes, my son With promises of truces later Beware of him, and he you’ll shun For it is he who is the traitor "Difficult....not impossible"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5250 12/19/03 04:08 PM 12/19/03 04:08 PM
Joined: May 2002 Posts: 775 No where B Boss_of_bosses Underboss
Boss_of_bosses B Underboss Joined: May 2002 Posts: 775 No where	Neri was talking care of matters with Klingman's removal from the Casino hotel in Vegas. So he wasn't there the night of the attempted hit on Mike.

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5251 12/19/03 04:29 PM 12/19/03 04:29 PM
Joined: Oct 2003 Posts: 19,066 OH, VA, KY Mignon Mama Mig
Mignon Mama Mig Joined: Oct 2003 Posts: 19,066 OH, VA, KY	Cheers THAT WAS WONDERFUL WISH I WAS THAT TALENTED Dylan Matthew Moran born 10/30/12

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5252 12/19/03 04:38 PM 12/19/03 04:38 PM
Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 8,766 South of the Pinelands MaryCas
MaryCas Joined: Apr 2002 Posts: 8,766 South of the Pinelands	Quote quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Originally posted by MaryCas: Maybe next you could tackle the Jabberwocky! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Why, that's what you said last year Oh no, its happening again, Ground Hog Day! Whoever exalts himself will be humbled, whoever humbles himself will be exalted - Matthew 23:12

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5253 12/19/03 05:06 PM 12/19/03 05:06 PM
Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope plawrence OP RIP StatMan
plawrence OP RIP StatMan Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope	Quote Originally posted by Boss_of_bosses: Neri was talking care of matters with Klingman's removal from the Casino hotel in Vegas. So he wasn't there the night of the attempted hit on Mike. Poetic License. "Difficult....not impossible"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5254 12/19/03 05:17 PM 12/19/03 05:17 PM
Joined: Jun 2003 Posts: 129 Boston Don'tForgetTheCannolis Made Member
Don'tForgetTheCannolis Made Member Joined: Jun 2003 Posts: 129 Boston	that was very impressive plaw, however i would like to hear one that includes the first godfather as well "Take it easy"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5255 12/19/03 05:45 PM 12/19/03 05:45 PM
Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope plawrence OP RIP StatMan
plawrence OP RIP StatMan Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope	Jeeze...This is a much tougher audience than last year's. One guys wants The Jabberwocky, someone else wants a whole new version about Part One, somebody says I don't have my facts straight... Actually, a few ideas for a Part One version are starting to germinate... "So Mike went to the hospital to visit his dad And what he would see there would make him quite mad His father, unguarded, "Move the bed, nurse", he'd make her When who should arrive there but Enzo. Da baker." or, how about "Mike emerged from the bathroom, the gun in his belt Then sat down at the table, amazed how he felt He stood up with a start, gave the table a jerk Pulled out his gun, and then shot the Turk As he turned to McClusky, still eating his meal He realized he'd not get to finish his veal The Turk said those cutlets were the best in the city To leave some of it over was really a pity" "Difficult....not impossible"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5256 12/19/03 07:07 PM 12/19/03 07:07 PM
Joined: Dec 2003 Posts: 42 T The Ant Wiseguy
The Ant T Wiseguy Joined: Dec 2003 Posts: 42	i really like it, and the verses you did for part I are good too.

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5257 12/19/03 07:30 PM 12/19/03 07:30 PM
Joined: Nov 2002 Posts: 12,543 Gateshead, UK Capo de La Cosa Nostra
Capo de La Cosa Nostra Joined: Nov 2002 Posts: 12,543 Gateshead, UK	Quote Originally posted by plawrence: Um, I wrote it.... Of course he wrote it! (The money's in the post, I assume, Plaw? ) Excellent use of rhythm, rhyming couplets and humor to sum my favourite plot of the trilogy up (that of Part II). Bravo, man! Mick ...dot com bold typeface rhetoric. You go clickety click and get your head split. 'The hell you look like on a message board Discussing whether or not the Brother is hardcore?

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5258 12/19/03 11:28 PM 12/19/03 11:28 PM
Joined: Nov 2003 Posts: 701 Connecticut Don Lights Underboss
Don Lights Underboss Joined: Nov 2003 Posts: 701 Connecticut	Very nice job, as you show great talents as a writer.

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5259 12/20/03 02:16 AM 12/20/03 02:16 AM
Joined: Dec 2003 Posts: 417 Washington, DC Valadius Capo
Valadius Capo Joined: Dec 2003 Posts: 417 Washington, DC	Excellent job. Publish a collection of Godfather poems.

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5260 12/20/03 06:32 AM 12/20/03 06:32 AM
Joined: Jul 2001 Posts: 22,902 New York SC Consigliere
SC Consigliere Joined: Jul 2001 Posts: 22,902 New York	Our friend plawrence once drove a cab, His poems and stories are always fab, But don't bring up sports, He gets out of sorts, When his fantasy teams lose he's a major crab. Very nice job, plaw! .

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5261 12/23/03 04:17 PM 12/23/03 04:17 PM
Joined: Oct 2003 Posts: 4,249 Desolation Row Don Sonny Corleone Underboss
Don Sonny Corleone Underboss Joined: Oct 2003 Posts: 4,249 Desolation Row	Damn, that was good. I printed it out and put it on my wall next to a mob version of that. If winners never lose, well, then a loser sure can sing the blues.

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5262 12/23/03 04:26 PM 12/23/03 04:26 PM
Joined: Sep 2003 Posts: 365 National City, CA Caporegime Capo
Caporegime Capo Joined: Sep 2003 Posts: 365 National City, CA	Masterful work, Plawrence. I'll make sure to share that one with the kids come Christmas Eve. Very creative! Sal: "Tom, can you get me off the hook? For old times' sake?"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5263 12/10/04 10:31 AM 12/10/04 10:31 AM
Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope plawrence OP RIP StatMan
plawrence OP RIP StatMan Joined: Aug 2002 Posts: 15,058 The Slippery Slope	For all the new members...... "Difficult....not impossible"

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5264 12/10/04 04:35 PM 12/10/04 04:35 PM
Joined: Oct 2004 Posts: 68 dunsatble, england jordyallen101 Button
jordyallen101 Button Joined: Oct 2004 Posts: 68 dunsatble, england	wicked mate errrr

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5265 12/10/04 05:16 PM 12/10/04 05:16 PM
Joined: Jun 2003 Posts: 924 toronto mr. soprano Underboss
mr. soprano Underboss Joined: Jun 2003 Posts: 924 toronto	very good job, im very impressed. "strange things happen all the time, and so it goes and so it goes. and the book says, 'we may be through with the past, but the past is not through with us'" - MAGNOLIA

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5266 12/10/04 05:58 PM 12/10/04 05:58 PM
Joined: Aug 2001 Posts: 18,238 The Ravenite Social Club Don Cardi Caporegime
Don Cardi Caporegime Joined: Aug 2001 Posts: 18,238 The Ravenite Social Club	EXCELLENT MY FRIEND!!!! Plaw, you definately should have a Christmas card made, with the GFII logo and your poem inside! Don Cardi Don Cardi Five - ten years from now, they're gonna wish there was American Cosa Nostra. Five - ten years from now, they're gonna miss John Gotti.

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5267 12/10/04 10:18 PM 12/10/04 10:18 PM
Joined: Apr 2004 Posts: 4,206 Los Angeles Letizia B. Underboss
Letizia B. Underboss Joined: Apr 2004 Posts: 4,206 Los Angeles	Quote Originally posted by plawrence: Um, I wrote it.... This keeps happening... there was an identical post to this in the NEW prayer thread. I guess people underestimate you, Plaw! Very nice, I love it!!

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5268 12/10/04 10:48 PM 12/10/04 10:48 PM
Joined: Oct 2001 Posts: 713 once again, Buffalo, NY! ChrisY2J Underboss
ChrisY2J Underboss Joined: Oct 2001 Posts: 713 once again, Buffalo, NY!	Nice work. "Keep your body strong, your blood clean, and your mind sharp and mean." Henry Rollins

Re: "The Night Of The Hit Attempt" #5269 12/11/04 01:25 AM 12/11/04 01:25 AM
Joined: Mar 2003 Posts: 12,724 D Double-J
Double-J D Joined: Mar 2003 Posts: 12,724	I know I've alluded to the fact that Plaw is Jayson Stark from ESPN.com, but now I think I've got it. or maybe...

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